stooped on porches is nice word play...having a hard time putting the image together but each line really is nice...
great last line, very well crafted word play indeed.
I agree with Brian, love the word play
i like that - stooped on porches not yours...great line..it has the quality of an wake up call...and then the line green socks, screaming...wow...kudos...a fine haiku
those socks - brilliant - what a great line
With few words, you've written a unique piece. Enjoyed it :)
stooped on porches is nice word play...having a hard time putting the image together but each line really is nice...
ReplyDeletegreat last line, very well crafted word play indeed.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Brian, love the word play
ReplyDeletei like that - stooped on porches not yours...great line..it has the quality of an wake up call...and then the line green socks, screaming...wow...kudos...a fine haiku
ReplyDeletethose socks - brilliant - what a great line
ReplyDeleteWith few words, you've written a unique piece. Enjoyed it :)
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